On the weekend I went to my dads house my mum dropped me at his work were I got some eggs and toast then me and dad went home in is Toyota and he put in a pipe that made it a lot faster in his turbo then we had a nice movie night.
We had dinner at monster chicken with our friend who lives in Gore me and my dad got some chips and tenders with some garlic bread then for the drinks I had a Oreo milkshake and my dad had a ice tea.
We made some lolly cake we made about 5kg's of it.
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Luke
We had dinner at monster chicken with our friend who lives in Gore me and my dad got some chips and tenders with some garlic bread then for the drinks I had a Oreo milkshake and my dad had a ice tea.
We made some lolly cake we made about 5kg's of it.
Please tell me how my writing is looking.
Thank you
Luke
Hi Luke.I have enjoyed reading your post.I did find it a little hard as it didn't have much punctuation. It could do with a few more full stops and then you would need to add capital letters.What movie did you and dad watch and did you get to chose the movie? You mentioned that your dads friend is from Gore. Have you heard of a place called 'Clinton'? That's where I am from. I look forward to hearing from you
ReplyDeleteHello Mrs Cassidy, thank-you for the feedback. I will try my best to work on my punctuation. Yes, I have herd about Clinton, when you asked room 6 where you are from I asked my mum and she asked my cousin and she said Clinton.
ReplyDeleteHi luke was that good lolly cake did you get some or no but i hope it was fun at your dad house
ReplyDeleteHello Luke,
ReplyDeleteSup dude Nice blog post. So I saw that you had a lot of food in your weekend. Wow 5kg of lolly cake did you eat it all? I also saw that your dad had a Toyota what kind? Work on your spelling a bit more you also need to work on your capital letters. All together good blog post. Keep up the good work. Tom